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Chapter 65: Pages 11- 18. by taeshilh Chapter 65: Pages 11- 18. by taeshilh
This one's a biggie, be careful. Sue looks like she's floating in the first panel, but I think that's to give the effect that she's separated from everyone else as she was the sole witness to Mike's "sacrifice" and stuff.

Lily's dialogue is also the worst ever, I wish I coulda changed it. She's meant to sound smart, but man does she sound kind of retarded here.

Also I can't draw hands carrying a body, aaaaa

Lucy is so clearly illogically dependent.

The last panel on page 18 was a freaken BITCH. First time ever doing that kind of perspective, I don't think I nailed it.. but hopefully it makes sense!

There's many more flaws I can see, but I really should save it all up for the commentary when this is posted on the webpage XD See you Tuesday.

Pages 1-4: [link]
Pages 5-10: [link]
Pages 11-18: What you see now.
Pages 19- 24: [link]
Pages 25 - 28: [link]
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BeanNPeas Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2009
lol yashy
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LittleScorpio Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2008
The suspense continues...

I love the consistency of the inking throughout the pages in terms of quality.

A few things I see though. Lucy, when she is kicking Paulo and punching David... her anatomy seems off. Also, in panels 6-8 on page 18, is Lucy smiling?

Ohhh poor Lucy. I love how Lily takes charge, though.
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2008  Professional General Artist
She was meant to appear rubbery, it was supposed to be cartoony, as hard as it is for me to say that XD Like I always hate using that reason because it's like "SCREW ANATOMY I GOT MONEY", but I don't know. I think in that one instance I just wanted her to just.. fling like a rubber band.

She is smiling XD
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jackprower Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2008
You know, for some odd reason on page 14, when McCain states that Mike fell, it oddly reminds me of Gimli in LOTR and how he says that Aragorn fell.

I don't know, McCain reminds me of Gimli, it's the short stature, the clever intelligentness and witty stuff that he does. So every time I read that I saw McCain, but heard John Rhys Davies... You should look into him to voice act, oh yeah! lol!

Aside from that, this is spectacular, you have shown great improvement as an artist through the past couple of months than many artists who take years to improve this well! Kudos!
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Selphite Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
Hoooly crap! That was intense! I've been reading this since last week, and I haven't posted a little feedback in a while.. so I guess I'll give it a shot.

Firstly, AMAZING JOB with the new layout of the comic, it's very dynamic and fits in well with how you make your characters interact with each other. The comic layout has its flaws as they do, as some panels are small and hard to make out, and with all of the character interaction, it's hard to see subtle details to characters' movements and motions, yet these small nitpicks pale in comparison to your previous work, where there were problems with reading text sometimes. However, that's nearly gone now; you've come a long way. Overall, amazing job, just amazing.

Next, I wanna talk about Lucy. WHYYYYY IS SHE SO EMOTIONALLY ATTACHED TO MIKE DKJFSLAJFSKAHFSLGHSALFJEWIJFIJSACKNZFSIFJS, haha, just kidding. I throughly enjoyed the breakdown that Lucy had, but Paulo's noble protection of Lucy after that happens is troubling, how would Paulo take it when they actually find Mike and she goes running back to him? I really don't want- "SHIT JUST GOT REAL!" -wait, what the?-- -gunned down- moment. Oh well, the catporn satisfies me, so I won't elaborate on my whining about this anymore, except I lol'd at Lucy's moaning when David poked her boob, naughty naughty David.

MikeXLucy forever, Sandy's been out of the picture way too long, and I hate her for basically putting a chastity belt on Mike, especially when Lucy obviously wants to hit that (besides Paulo of course), and she's probably getting busy with some manly cat and leaving Mike presents to make up for it-- RRRRRAAAAGE. Oh well, can't blame her really, long distance relationships are troublesome.

If it was too long and you didn't wanna read, I'll sum it up for you with these words: GREAT. JOB. GOOD. UP. WORK. KEEP. IS. LUCY. MIKE. BANG. TO. WANTS. ...not in that order though. (Seriously, all aces work, you're gonna do great things with those cats).
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DavCube Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
Yashy: King of Subtlety.
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SoftMonKeychains Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
HOLY COW, THEY KILLED KENNY!!!! YOU BASTAR....oops, wrong script, lol! I mean.....ZHCXSHDH!!! THEY KILLED MIKEY!!!!
Poor cattie, hope that is alive!
And David is just so naive and pervert!!!!!! I wanna him!
And teh most useful life saver!!!! (I was ironic in this sentence)
Oh boy, the last panel will just like the trip to the center of Earth!!!!
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sloopygoop Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008
Oh wow, this is an incredible story!
It's really cool to see each character having something to do in this story. (For instance, the birds getting help, Yashi reacting dramatically to the bump game and to Mike's plunge of death, David being wacky and perverted, Lucy being both dependent and kickass, Kizuna being her clumsy self.) I think the last page is my favorite, with David apparently delighted to be chased by a bear. That very last panel is pretty crazy too. Paulo looks like an epic hero as he plunges down with Lucy.
I wonder if Paulo will take advantage of Lucy's temporary state of adherence to him. He seems like he's being very noble, actually, and wanting to help her.
I'm not quite feeling Lucy's breakdown...but it was done really snazzily. And the "people getting knocked off the cliff because the very last person has inertia" thing has definitely been done before, but you did it plenty well. It was fast-paced enough to be deliciously, horribly funny.
Aw man, so glad to be reading this.
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008  Professional General Artist
I think it's just Kizuna being clumsy as always when she knocks everyone out XD I think it is a cliche thing to happen, but Kizuna in particular I felt would be fitting to cause that because she always ruins everything that requires a lack of clumsiness "XDDD"
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Dark-Dragon-Rod Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008
oh shi-!

D=
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caffeinerabbit Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008  Professional General Artist
And thus we witness the genesis of LucyxPaulo...
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Pawlaczun Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008
ahhh... mature content... too bad mike is not dead... "dying" would be good for story line...
anyway it was worth to wait for comic... GOOD WORK TAESHI! ^^

and last words:
OMG CAT PORN !!! ^^
(or dog porn ? geeez... it's soooo difficult... T__T )
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Valejandra-Fox Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
You nailed Lucy's mental breakdown, I didn't expect her to do that at all D:
-and I can't believe how many insensitive people there are :XD: but I like how you added humor in the midst of all the drama, poor Mike T.T

Great job on the shading and I love the end of the last two pages :D

David's so innocent it's scary.
(and I just realized how tiny McCain is... it's so adorible o_o he's being carried by Sue!)
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Ud-the-Imp Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Last panel: RRRRAAAAAAAAAGGGGLLLLLLLEEEEEE FRRRRAAAAAAAAAGGGLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEE!!!!!
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Professional General Artist
You're confusing! ;.; What does that mean?
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Ud-the-Imp Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008
General yell I reply whenever someone is in a life threatening situation, mostly in the form of flying through the air and/or falling.
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mlock Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
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mlock Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
whops...nevermind ^_^;

...nice page ;3
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Gulstab Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
STOP MAKING EACH POST BETTER.
Jesus, this is great work. Your perspective, backgrounds and EXPRESSIONS, oh god. Your execution, clean lines, knowledge of lights and darks, expressions, reactions, different personalities, etc. are so unique! I think I've found a new love for this series >_>

I'd also like to point out, the 2nd panel to last on the 2nd last page I found to have been well done the way you re-drew shading and brought out characters.. As well, the change for Lucy when she heard Mike had fallen was so drastic in mood change, and you pulled it off! Her hysteria after just adds onto it. :D

GREAT JOB. UPLOAD MORE. ;_;
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Xetch Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Nooo... Lucy... BAWWWWWWW
(Is seriously on the verge of crying for some reason)

In the panel where David is going to catch Lucy... I thought she had been kicked facing down, in the stomach? Also, wow, I never realized how tiny Lucy was compared to the rest.

The story is coming along brilliantly! My god, I hope Lucy will be alright! I'm REALLY curious as to what the outcome will be, I mean, we saw that Mike was alive, but I wonder how Lucy will deal? And Sue, too.

Lucyyyy ;.;
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mansonii Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Well. That's it for those characters.

So, what's your new comic going to be like? C:
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Professional General Artist
Eh?
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mansonii Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2008
From an uninformed view it looks as if you're letting the entire cast die from cliff-falling. Hence the comment.

(At first I started to speculate you'd just kill of Mike and Lucy to make Paulo and Tess the new main couple >w>;)
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hellokristen Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
David. XD
Gahh. I can't wait for the next pages.
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TwilightThorn Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Definetely alot of character interactivity and perspective here. and its done very well too. and the fact it is all in ink and pencil to get such a result is amazing on top of all that.

I blame McCain. Son of a bitch has to have a hook shot or something in that trench coat of his.
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Evang-y Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008   Photographer
WHAT A BEAR THAT BEAR IS

How come the bears are just bears but the cats and dogs and birds can talk huh huh huh

or does the bear just want to have tea or tell them where Mike is IS THAT THE PLOT TWIST

Also awesome cat tits.
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Professional General Artist
Hahahahah, I just wanted to give them a reason to run so I was all "LET ME JUST MAKE IT SOME SHADOWY SIMPLISTIC LOOKING BEAR"

I think they're running away because they're startled it's not like "hey guys what's going on" so it must be dangerous.

I love how you are the one to mention cattits, I was seriously expecting people to focus on that part "XDDD"

david the raping dog
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mayuzane Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2008  Student General Artist
"David the raping dog" should be a spin-off.
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Evang-y Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008   Photographer
Yeah I was surprised no one enjoys cat tits as much as I do?
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HojoMcOjo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
Oh man, this page was so full of intensity D:
AHHH! Oh man! I'm actually all worried and stuff! WHAT HAVE YOUR CATS DONE TO ME?!

Also wth David :XD:
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TakuniChan Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Student General Artist
I liked how Lucy started laughing. WHY DID I LIKE THAT?!
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AgentWebdog Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Student Digital Artist
It's so sad to see some one break down like that. Poor Lucy. I love how she insta-clings to paulo though, seeing as he's the first person there, and stuff.

I also love how Paulo's confident in the beginning that Mike's fine, then slowly becomes more worried it seems. Is he worried over Lucy or Mike?

Also, David's so innocent, he's amazing.

Can't wait for the next page. :D
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Professional General Artist
He's more worried over Lucy, he basically thinks Mike is totally fine, but was expecting Lucy to break down like that. So he's there as someone she can cling to.
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StardustHorizon Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Oh wow.. ._. I can't wait for the next pages. I'm all "Dude...Lucy freaked out. Bad. I didn't think she'd go nuts like that.." But yea, she's depended on Mike. Chirpy and Blur are so adorable though. Also David receives one facepalm from me.

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yeeeaaa...

P.S. - I REALLY like your inking and shading techniques.. whenever I ink and shade it just comes out like a BLOB OF MESS.
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mokomel Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Hobbyist
Poor Mike and Lucy..... D: I hope they find Mike in not too bad of a condition (though it shouldn't be too serious considering the start of the chapter).

And i do find it amusing that Sue is carrying McCain as they run away. XD Does she think he wouldn't run fast cuz he's short or something?
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MegaManZero90 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
I think Lucy snapped.^^;
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Necron-cheese Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
Yay! A new set of pages to help me avoid my biology report further! XDDD

Ahh, comedy and dramaticism (is that a word?) in equal measure, one of the best things about Bittersweet Candy Bowl. That and there are cats in it. ^^
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bumblegoo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
I got to enjoy a new comic bomb with my daily bowl of honey nut cheerios! :D

I hope they find Mike..
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Acoustic-Fox Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
ineresting! cant wait for more! does lucy like-like mike or something? cause i thought she didnt...
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taeshilh Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Professional General Artist
Lucy's actually mentally dependent on the guy, like heavilyyyyyyy so. It's complicated ":-[" Which is why she breaks down when she assumes he dies.
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Acoustic-Fox Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
wow... thats messed up XD she gots problems -shot- but anyways, Will Mike eventually ever leave sally for Lucy? Cause i think they belong together more^^
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